Part I Writing
標準版
Doing Shopping Online
With the development of the Internet, shopping is no longer a tiring thing. Just click your mouse to choose the articles you like, and the purchase is done. You don't even have to step out of the room. It seems all easy and quick.
However, people's opinions vary on this trend. Some believe that on line shopping is time and money saving. With plentiful selection options, they can buy whatever they like at any time convenient. Still others insist that mis-purchasing alone is annoying enough, not to mention the credibility of the sellers and the safety of their accounts.
In my opinion, the convenience and excitement of on line shopping is beyond all doubts. In the meantime, we must always bear in mind that certain traps do exist, so we'd better make sure the sellers are trustworthy before buying. In addition, we should also guard ourselves from the potential hackers who might steal our account information.
文章點評：
這是一篇“中等偏上”的學生作文。 本文先對網購熱潮進行簡介，引出全篇；接着對網絡購物的正反兩方面進行對比；最後提出自己的看法結束全篇。整體看思路清晰，邏輯嚴密，行文流暢，用語較爲地道。
下面說一下這篇文章的有待提高之處：
1. 文章結構上，能看得出該同學試圖採用議論文的“三段式”（提出問題、分析問題、解決問題）。 但是，以“With the development of the Internet”爲開首語，有些落入俗套，有硬套模板的嫌疑。稍加註意，應該能寫出更好的句子。
2. 微觀語言點方面，有些語句稍顯囉嗦，比如With plentiful selection options… 簡化成With plentiful selections… 更好，意思沒有絲毫減損，表達力反而增強許多；
高分版
With the help of the ever rapid development of internet technology, online shopping is coming into fashion in most of cities.
Online shopping is welcomed by most people due to various reasons. From the perspective of consumer, it can save some time for people who don't have much spare time. Just click the mouse, they can get whatever they want while staying at home. For the retailers, it can cut some costs for those who don't have much circulating funds. They don't have to rent a house and spend money on employees compared with the traditional trade mode. However, there are still some defects in online shopping. First, lace of face to face deal makes online shopping less reliable and trustworthy. Second, people will lose the fun of bargain.
It is undeniable that shopping on the internet has become an irresistible trend in modern society. It's of great urgency that we need to regulate the relative laws accordance with the rapid growth of online shopping. Only in this way can we enjoy the pleasure and convenience of online shopping without the concern of being treated.
點評：
本次四級作文探討的是最近的熱點話題之一——互聯網網購。目前網購的風靡程度是衆所周知，因此，考生對於該話題還是比較熟悉的`。但是，比較特殊的是，題幹所列出的要求的是考生從一個客觀的角度來闡述該話題，而不是簡單陳述自己的意見。所以，考生應當審清楚題，在寫作時不僅僅要列出網購的優點，還必須給出相應的缺點。
按照四級作文的要求，考生在第一段時應該總述現象並引出話題；
第二段考生應當從正反兩方面來論述網購，分別鋪陳其優缺點；關於優點，網購的優點很多，考生可擇其最突出顯著的方面來闡述，比如說網購可以節省很多時間；網購可以節省很多成本開支等；其次，缺點方面考生可以把重心放在誠信方面；爲了不至於跟優點相比，缺點方面太輕，考生可以考慮稍微提一下其他缺點，比如說與傳統購物相比，網購少去了很多砍價的樂趣；
第三點要求考生對於第二段列出的缺點給出自己的建議。此處我們可以根據第二段列出的缺點方面給出相應的防範應對措施。
整篇作文話題比較好展開，難度不大，只要考生審好題，列出相應點，相信作文不會他是難題。
